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A mochi bounced down the hall as fast as its round, fat body could allow. It saw the door, just to its left. Complete and utter delight filled its being. All it could do was keep hopping to its only opening for freedom. The mochi turns around quickly, panting in terror, but it sees nothing. It made a sharp turn and jumped at the doorknob, grabbing it with its mouth. In an instant joy faded and terror flooded into its place like the walls of a dam breaking.  When it turned the knob, the door wouldn't open. Panic level rising to its highest, the mochi rattled the knob again. There were tears welling up in its eyes. It had come so far already and now this was the end. It knew it wouldn't escape, but that did not mean it was not going to try and run. The mochi tried the knob again. It was stubbornly locked from the outside. It freezes and glances around for a moment, but again, nothing comes at it.

The mochi was backed into a wall and a solidly locked door. As it backs away from the door, dejection evident in its face, its heart starts to race, so that the thumping is echoing in its ears. The mochi let go and turned around to find a place to hide once more. However, its predator was right behind it. It cowered in fear, backed into a corner with no means of escape, no means of fighting back, no means of survival. A whimper of terror escaped its mouth. Tears now flowed quickly down its chubby cheeks. Its attacker loomed closer and closer yet. Death was inescapable, just like this creature was inescapable. The mochi closed its eyes, unable to bear the fact that despite everything it had done, it was going to die regardless.

If anyone was walking near the mansion in the mountains, they would have heard a desperate plea for mercy ringing in the air with tragic melancholy.  

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A deserted mansion in a mountain about three hours away from the world meeting place.

No one knows how long it has been there or who used to live in it.

Rumors had it that it was haunted...
Okay, so Iím going to write a version of HetaOni, except this one is going to have reader-san (you) and myself. I promised this a while ago. Since it is the prologue, we are not in it yet my friend but we will be.

By going forth and reading this, you are hereby giving up the rights to blame me for spoilers shock.

Oh, and if I get to part 17 part 1 and part 2 had yet to be released, I will consider making my own ending. So leave me input on that. How would you like it to end?
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lovesoniccharacters Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
Ooh, ooh!!!!! I can use an AK-47 or a Bazooka!!!!!!!
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SexyPikachu Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
I LIKE IT XD
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
For a weapon can an option be a bow or dagger please?
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
A bow is already used by Canada, so no.

A dagger might be a minor weapon but not a main weapon.
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Half the characters have guns, some have swords, one uses magic and books, one just a book and epic pasta powers, so what would be left?
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Oh plenty of weapons. I'm an RPG buff so I know all sorts of weapons.
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Okay. There are really that many weapons that aren't overpowered or taken?
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013
I know a few so it'll be kind of fun.
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013
Oh my god. That is an AWESOME way of describing the beginning. I always did like that adorable little Amerimochi!
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
You and me both. Viva la Amerimochi!
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OCTransylvaniaRP Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Unfortunately, I also find mochis tasty, so I have to think happy thoughts whenever eating some and avoid thinking of Mochitalia. They're less adorable when you avoid thinking of them, because you can't think of the adorableness. Long live Amerimochi!:iconmochiplz:
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MissRussia24601 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Poor little guy!
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SexyPikachu Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013
I'm sorry, but your profile picture is hilarious. xD
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MissRussia24601 Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconjapanpastaplz:
What can I say?? I'm just pretty cool XD
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
We find him later so it's all good.
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That1AsianChick Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
.......mochi?
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013
It started with the mochi in the game and so I thought it fitting to start with the mochi in the story.
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That1AsianChick Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh. okay. I've never seen it before, so.....
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
That's okay. Hey, here's the link if you're interested. [link]
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:iconthat1asianchick:
That1AsianChick Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks. :/ great. now I'm addicted...
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hidansstalkers Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I enjoyed this way too much! Hope to see more soon!
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:iconkita-kudai:
kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Next chapter should be up soon. I'm almost done with it.
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DreamFutureAis Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh. My. Gods. :iconjawdrop:
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012
Excited?
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DreamFutureAis Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very. :D
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crazy-aika Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Almost a heart attack for reading it. Good job in suspense n-n
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Yeah, it was kind of fun to write it that way!
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CupcakeGirl811 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Here's a crazy idea for a weapon what about a blow torch? Or what about something like a bazooka, machine gun, or smoke bomb? I donno just putting out some crazy unique ideas. Anyway I look forward to reading more.
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Blow torch seems too excessive. I don't want to give anyone a better weapon than the main Hetalia characters. Bazooka could be used to help blast the door open and help them escape... So maybe smoke bombs... But nothing crazier than that. I'll keep looking around for different weapons.
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Sorami-san Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
HOLY MOTHER OF GOD! THIS IS JUST AWESOME!
I've never seen a FF wrote in such an amazing way, though it's short! The way, You described it...GOD I wish I could write like that!
I just cannot wait for the next part~! x3
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
It's short because it is the prologue. Prologues are kind of like teaser trailers.

Trust me, it took years of practice.
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Sorami-san Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2012
I guess so! I'm writing fanfictions and stories since a few years and some of my better works are about equal to this level, but only in polish. When I try to translate them to english, their quality drastically decreases XD I always have problems to find the best fitting words, when translating. But maybe, someday I'll be as good in english too~?
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012
Translation is always hard. To be honest, I've never tried it. I commend you for working that hard!
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s-weetheart Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Writer
Omg I've been waiting for someone to do this! YAYYYY!!! You have no idea how pumped I am to read this!! But Hmmmmm~ for a weapon I think the reader should use a gun or be awesome at martial arts~ and for the ending if you want it sad maybe the reader can sacrifice their self so everyone else can get out? Lol idk XP
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
Maybe... I'm still debating.

Don't worry, there will be a satisfactory ending. I'll make sure of it.
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s-weetheart Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student Writer
Well whatever you choose it will most definitely be amazing as always :meow: and because you're writing it I already know there will be a satisfactory ending~ X3
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012
Thanks. It will be harder but I'll do my best.
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MoHarri Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student General Artist
I can't wait to read this ^-^ i wanna know what weapon I shall be using >=D hopefully it's not a sword... I'm not the best with sharp objects ^^; but Poor Mochi I feel like we must save it
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
What weapon do you feel reader-san should have? I'm still debating myself.

We will save it! Viva la Mochi!
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MoHarri Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student General Artist
huh... well I think a gun would be easy to use that's really just point aim fire and pray to god it hits your intended target, but America usually has a gun and I don't know if you want to double use weapons... I guess most of the people out here are artists of some sorts and the only weapon I can think of in an artist repertoire (other then throwing their art bin at people and smashing them upside the head with a portfolio) would be x-acto knife, box cutter, mat cutter, possible jewelers saw, but those are all sharp objects I have cut myself with before XD. all the other things I'm coming up with would be like battle ax, bo staff, bow and arrow, or cross bow...

VIVA LA MOCHI!!!
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012
I don't feel too keen on replicating weapons. America has one and where would we find one in the mansion? Sharp objects are already ruled out because of the lack of places to store a weapon like that.

I thought Spain had an axe... Canada has a bow and arrow.

Mochi forever!
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MoHarri Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student General Artist
I didn't think you would be to keen on replicating weapons... and you can find a knife in a kitchen... but I don't remember if the mansion had a kitchen or not.

and darn ... Spain does have an ax... and honestly I forgot Canada was in HetaOni ;.; I'm such a bad person

I mean now I'm thinking weird weapons like blow darts, but you would most likely have to of brought that with you.

Squish the Mochi forever!!!!!!!!!!!!
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
The kitchen was where Japan found the broken plate.

How could you forget Canada?! :iconcryforever:

Blow darts? ... For some reason I just pictured Prussia stealing it and shooting someone in the bum on accident...

I shall name him squishy. I shall love him and feed him and he shall forever be my squishy!
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MoHarri Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student General Artist
I know I'm such a bad person :iconcornerplz: I'm gonna go sit there now :iconprussiasulkplz:

... and now that you mention it Prussia would be the one to blow dart some one in the tush.
Lets see some other weapons I know of (now that I have found my old paper on weapons used in Tai-chi) seven sectional chai chain, fire wheals, a fan (usually metal, but normal ones can be used as weapons as well, but are more so used for deflecting) Di so Gee it's kinda like a bo staff, but has a small part of it that separates or is connected by a small chain and can be used to wrap around legs or swing into peoples heads. Tiger fork, it kinda looks like a pitch fork, three sectional stick, it's kinda like the Di So Gee but it's 3 parts. other then that I'm thinking Hammer but that could also be because I just watched Thor again. oh and a morning star or flail, but I see Spain using those, though I know he uses an ax >< other then that I'm running out of ideas... I'm sorry =/

Be careful the cute sweet innocent mochi doesn't bite you.
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012
Think about what you've done!

See, I'm not the only one who thinks that.

I've got the weapon all picked out now! I'm excited.

I wouldn't feed the mochi scones so he has no reason to wish to bite me.
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British-Hero Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ouo This shall be kick ass~
But what weapons would reader-tan and You have? .w.
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012
I'm still not sure. What do you feel the reader should have? Swords are relatively common so I'm ruling that one out and I have mine already in mind.
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British-Hero Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Hmm... maybe a spear or lance... or even a Hammer |D
I'm just thinking of these quickly XD
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kita-kudai Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012
Hammer... Hmm... That's possible... Wait no! You're brilliant!

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British-Hero Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
ASDF really? :D
Thank Thor for inspiration X'D

And now... we can used the pun; Stop! Hammer Time!
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